Chapter 1 Review[]
Great work, BT. I really enjoyed reading this. It was very well written, and I really enjoy desert stuff (dunno why). The ending where PoS starts feeling hope and stuff reminds me of the direction Chalka will be heading soon. Noice work ;P. ~~Chalk33
Critique of Chapters 1-2[]
Hi BIONICLEToa. I've finished my critique of your first two chapters as we discussed in the chat today. It's in a google doc with the critique done in the form of sidebar comments that are tied to highlighted portions of your text. Would you like me to link it here, or should I wait until the next time we're both in the chat so I can give you the link privately? ToaAuserv? 04:52, March 26, 2015 (UTC)
- As requested, the critique. You can click into any of the highlighted fields to read the associated comment. Let me know if you can't see the comments or if there are any other technical difficulties, because google docs can be temperamental sometimes. ToaAuserv? 23:31, March 26, 2015 (UTC)
I appreciate your feedback, Aurserv! I edited some of the parts you critiqued, and it made the writing a lot better. Your critiques helped me spot out some errors I didn't even know I was making, so I'll make sure to keep those in mind when writing.
I'm greatful you helped out with it!