Talk:Fall

Rating
So this is your first story on the CBW, Falcon? Then let's start rating it!

I think it's nice you chose the first Forgotten Warrior we ever saw as the protagonist! This rather short story had some nice action in it, and the mentioning of all these characters we saw in Uprising was pretty cool.

Sadly a reader who reads this story without any knowledge of my comics will get easily confused. There is no real introduction, the story just starts and then ends pretty quick. This makes not enough room for any real suspense or character development. I know that Borodus is a ruthless Toa with him leaving behind his teammates, and that's pretty well done.

After all there were no plot errors I saw, so this is your final scoring:

Style of writing: ( 9 / 10 )

Originality: ( 5 / 10 )

Suspense: ( 5 / 10 )

Character development: ( 5 / 10 )

Matching with the canon: ( 1 / 1 )

Total: ( 24 / 40 )

-- 18:00, December 19, 2013 (UTC)