Talk:Render's Blog

Just a few things
From what I've read so far, it's a good story (I really liked the line you gave "Proto-Beast"). You just need to work on your grammer and spelling. Also, try calling the chapters Entries. It makes it sound like an actual journal (which is really what Blogs are) than a story book. Try looking at Takanuva's Blog or my Moliki's Blog to get an idea of how to improve your writting skills. So, overall, great story. You just need a little improvment. (Toa Hydros 16:31, 2 December 2008 (UTC))