User blog comment:FireDrag1091/''Declaration'' Reveal + Christmas Greetings/@comment-4767722-20150416064638

Behold the feedback:

Starting things off, it's well detailed how vastly foreign the Lykos Kinsmen are, from different languages, to titles, etc. There also seems to be some kind of median view of both sides of the story's conflict. For one thing, Polemistis' third person narration doesn't make it seem as if he's power hungry and rather radical in his culture's views, while the other side indeed does. It's probably because I read some stuff the wrong way or something but that's how it was to me.

Next, the structure of the plot seems a bit off to me. When we get to the second half of Road of Life, it's as if we've just started over or something. Now from Vulf's point of view upon her entry into this new universe, the story seems to be more beneficial if it officially started here instead of in one of the prologues that actually don't seem to be prologues when I think about it. Polemistis' ascension to Ultra Director and Vulf's fight with Erevayx are enough to fill out a single prologue. I'm also down with the battle against the Makuta and their monsters, however in hindsight, I think it'd be much better if you only limited the narrating to describing the aftermath of the Burn of Destral and the scene within the Makuta's library or wherever that was. While descriptive, the way it's written makes it feel less like a prologue and more of the actual opening scene of the tale.

In fact, Vulf's arrival into the V Osade Universe might as well have been the first scene of the first chapter instead of the penultimate moment of the final prologue.

Overall, the three prologues are fine reads. It's just that the placement of the events are odd choices for me.