Talk:Rebel Destiny

Official NRC Review
This is a very underrated story. And considering that there are over half a thousand on this site waiting to be read, that's saying something. Especially when you take into account the fact that this is 's first epic.

To put it another way: Sturgeon's Law says that 90% of everything is crap. In the world of BIONICLE fanfic, this belongs to the other 10%.

Have I made my point yet?

Well then.

At first glance, the plot idea is honestly nothing new: evil empire takes over, good resistance fights back, war ensues, heroic acts occur. From the beginning, though, it's clear that neither side is fully "good" or wholly "evil", and that's very good to start with. As the story continues, the main characters are well-fleshed out, though some of the secondary ones seem to only be there to help with the story progress.

Despite this, the story in question is a good one: the author takes the page-turner, let's-have-a-fight-every-other-minute style of BIONICLE and exploits it well, leaving readers hooked for the next installment. The writing isn't excellent (though, again, much better than one would come to expect from a first epic), but the story's too entertaining for me too care very much.

Of course, there are still a few downsides. The way that the action flows seamlessly from moment to moment gets a bit tiring, and the plot gets predictable at times. Also, some bits of the writing seem unprofessional and out-of place, especially the parts where we're not-so-subtly told what to think about a character. The characterization should be good enough for us to decide for ourselves.

Otherwise, though, there aren't many major problems. Given that time tends to make people improve at what they try, I have little doubt that Nuju's writing is going to get better and better. Now, it may be that the reason I'm rating this story so well is that it's a first epic, where troubles are expected. Keep in mind that as time goes by, my expectations regarding this author are going to get higher and higher. Doubtless, though, they will continue to be fulfilled and exceeded like they have been here.

Good job, Nuju. And good luck.

Rating: B

Sli cer   Out  16:55, March 29, 2011 (UTC)