Talk:The Complexity of Creation

"Vilicia looked at the substance, it seemed strange, almost as if it was alive."

- Subtlety/10

Gotta admit, this is a big step forward from some of your previous works, both in terms of execution and story content. Feels as though this is actually going somewhere and that you have plans for the future beginning to take shape in this early stage.

That being said, I still feel that characterization is consistently a big issue with your writing, especially of canon characters. Feels as though there were no efforts to acknowledge Velika's unique speaking pattern. I get that trying to emulate it is incredibly difficult for sustained conversation, but could you not slip in a passing proverb every second line to stay true to the character's origins perhaps?