User blog comment:Vorred/Elegy - Feedback Blog/@comment-11429692-20150114014235

At long last, I am reading Elegy :D. Finally ignoring my laziness :P. gosh, I miss the days when I was first commenter on Patriots chapters ;) . I'm going to do a review of all the chapters thus far here, and I'll do it while I read. So this'll probably crash wikia be long.

Prologue

I did not expect Berwak and Lanudos being on the same side. Not much else to say (or at least nothing I can put into words :P). Great Prologue ;D. (and now we know where Xarfi came from)

Chapter 1

Very nice work with this one (like I need to state it). I loved how you gave a tangible reason for their armor upgrades, and the way you executed it. Not sure what the random floating text was. It was probably Range, and I couldn't see him ;P.

Chapter 2

Ridor and Pauto have returned, I see. Funny thing is, I got the Lost comic when I was pressing the random page button, so I read it right before I started with Elegy :P. Anywho, Theran has me questioning the truth behind the Farside Toa's origins. I half believe it, and half don't. I can't wait to see where Merall's reunion goes (I'm guessing it'll stray to Chaeus at some point.)

Chapter 3

GRENTAR!!!!!! Loving how Theran acts to that guard. I was not expecting the presence of Lanudos and Berwak here. And I see you used the Noble Ruru after all :P. BTW, was the fractures thing a reference to the Doc's universe, or a coincidence? :P

Chapter 4

"Huh? Are you shouting at me Skakdi?" Love that. Absolutely love that. This chapter was highly interesting. Unexpected, to say the least.

Chapter 5

Poor Aescela :3. Interesting that it turned out to be a head. If Bionicle were organic, I would've lol'ed hard. I love how Kyhae keeps complaining about Theran. Makes me miss Solunus a bit though :/.

Chapter 6

Trying to dissipate Therall, are you? We finally know what Vorred's power is. It's pretty cool :P. And Khyae is so cuuuuuuuute :3. She’s like a hobbit. Without the hairy feet and excessive eating, and adventure-hating.

Chapter 7

Another great one. The whole Amarii and Sorol thing was very interesting. By any chance is that horn inspired by Narnia? :P

Chapter 8

Lovely chapter. I am glad to finally see Nuva again. I always like how he makes me question everything. I feel now like Gesikk is going to be more important in some way. I am starting to like Theran’s attitude more and more :P. I can’t wait to see what happens next!

Chapter 9

More killing without listening. I’m sorta surprised Merall would take an order such as that from Theran. And a lot of the story thus far reminds me of the RPG Skyrim. Particularly that “win a brawl with this dude and I’ll trust you”. Really great chapter!

Chapter 10

I can’t help but wonder if Lanudos knows about the orange titan. Not much else to say, not that I didn’t enjoy it. You can’t read this stuff and not enjoy it :P.

Chapter 11

“Knocked over like a toy figure…” lol. Nuva is a freakin’ boss. And, yet again, you have confused my brains so much. I’m still questioning everyone’s allegiance. This is wonderful work. But poor Theran :(. And that Skakdi…

Chapter 12

Loving the fact that Lanudos is a good Makuta. I know I don’t actually read much fanfic, but I don’t see that often, and I really like it. This was a really great chapter to read, and I’m sad that I’ll have to wait till Sunday for the next chapter. Also, I’m glad to see a Toa Hagah. I don’t see that often enough (again, that’s probably because I read such little fanfic :P.) I feel like we might see the rest of Lanudos’ Toa, but I don’t know if that would happen :P. Thanks for making such wonderful stories :D.