Talk:Turning Tides

Rating
Just as I did with the first entry I reviewed I'll talk about your story a bit before I'll get to your final scoring.

I think this story is pretty solid. You made a short introduction for Solunus and described their mission. The reader learns some information about them and how they learn about the Kanohi Tilira being at the Farside Village.

I've never thought about Nuva controlling an undead before but I think he could do that if he wanted but it would probably take a lot of his concentration. As you mentioned in the trivia, the Forgotten Warrior suddenly stops talking due to Vorred's attack on Nuva and that's pretty cool!

Other than that we didn't get any new information. I know you didn't wanted to come in conflict with the canon or it is because your story wasn't supposed to be long, but I feel like something that "catches the reader" is missing. We have the battle scene... but none of the obvious plot points that could be expanded upon were taken. Falecía for example wasn't there when they recruited the Farside Characters, why did she stay back? Stuff like that.

Altogether it's a pretty good written story even though it lacks of any real suspense. This will be your final scoring:

Style of writing: ( 6 10 )

Originality: ( 6 10 )

Suspense: ( 3 10 )

Character development: ( 6 10 )

Matching with the canon: ( 1 1 )

Total: ( 21 40 )