User blog comment:LoganWoerner/August 2013 - Story and MOC Concepts/@comment-1524575-20130901004022

Hm. The Artificial Toa Storyline is what introduced me to your writings and characters, mostly because it was a unique concept far beyond what I am usually capable of; so I am glad that you are returning to the concept once again. I'm trying to restart the Initiator Universe, since I do have a threat besides the Initiator's which at this time I would only like to call: the Racila; a threat as long as time.

I think that how you are planning to design Niha is, (while a bit unique in it's own sense) is a little representative to the way a few other writers designed their character. Like Vantelic, for example; as time moves on, he expands his knowledge about Engineering, creating multiple sets of body armor either Initiator-Inspired or otherwise. Like how his armor set went from the Mach-19, to the Mach-45, to the Mach-60, and eventually to the Mach-60 Initiator Modified Combat Skin; and then on to the next generation. As time passes, and he fixed major flaws from his old armor set, they are usually mass developed for Order use. So, wink wink, Niha could borrow a couple of designs from the Mach Series.

With the stories, I would prefer the Option #2 method because that is how you completed your first short story in the Trilogy. You need to catch the audience with something beside the origins of an Artificial Toa, set off with her first mission, her hundredth mission, whatever. It molds the character so they are more curious about her origins. Usually, I do it that way with my characters. The Instructor (now Adviser) for example, all we really should know is that he was a Military General, successor of a previous, well-known and highly respected General. I feel as if you introduce the character, and then explain how and who helped them get their, it makes the character better respected by the audience.

Now on too the Topic Discussions:


 * Probably the Artificial Toa concepts, possible rejects to the program and successors; that would mix into the story well if Niha would come across these AT's like herself who despise or like her depending on what situation she is in.


 * Like I said, Option #2. I think going on to Karda Nui would be interesting too, but it really depends why she would be there in the first place.


 * Organizing some sort of system to update it quickly and efficiently. Apply some trustworthy individuals to help update the page when needed, etc, etc.

Anyways, hope this helps!