Talk:Shopping

Bravo! Nicely done!

I'll be the first to admit, I'm really not a fan of Tiara. She's far too sexualized for my liking, which has always repelled me away from following up on her adventures. But this story has actually made me reconsider my stance on the character.

There were some fantastic quirks in this story, even if it was of a basic subject matter. The notion of "Raindrops" being an equivalent term for "Fire Spitter" shows you have taken remarkable creative license upon the BIONICLE canon to produce something deeply atmospheric. This really does feel like a successful depiction of that seedy, lawless, toxic paradise we like to call Xia.

I do take slight issue with the sexualization of Tiara, but I also feel that it's rather tastefully done. You dance around descriptions of her figure without once explicitly mentioning anything profane.

Overall, this feels to me like a very solid story. What's even more surprising is the fact that it was written pretty much within 24 hours of the contest opening (or sometime thereof). This is an example of an entry to the character swap contest done right. It has style, flare, and it has given me new-found respect for a character I used to loathe.