Talk:Spirit Shadows: Power

Now these clouds could hardly be distinguished in the dark grey sky...

Should be "from the dark...".

...everyone on board was thinkinging about the downpour of rain upon them.

Thinkinging.

''The hood of Jetera’s thick black cloak helped keep the rain off of his face. He was consistently finding himself surprised with the number of practical uses his cloak had – even though, when he had first arrived among the group of people he now called his teammates, he had no concept of what this hood was, or the purpose it served.''

Good description here, as well as zeroing in on the characters quickly. And it's interesting that he didn't know what a hood was. The emdash is used incorrectly. Emdashes cannot be used to replace a period, like you've done here. "...with the number of practical uses his cloak had. Though, when he had first..." Try that.

''Drainu, Master of Stone... Saidon, Master of Earth... Shaju, the Master of Water...''

Awesome, we know the entire roster of characters! I can see what you mean by how each of these stories can stand alone. I get that feeling from this passage.

At this point in time, I stopped looking for errors and went for plot. There doesn't seem to be too many mistakes. However, I will point out you have a few Meyer commas, which are unneeded commas frequently used by Stephanie Meyer. Example: But on the third day, the storm had started, and had raged for several hours. That, before "and" isn't really needed if you say it out loud.

Ayen, the Toa Vihagu’s deputy... Yeah. Who's Ayen? XD What does she look like? What element is she?

I'm not 100% sure about this part: ...scale the Temple for our victory. Scale? As in climb? Why do they need to climb the temple? And an interesting choice about the building. Temple of Arthaka. Is there religion in your Universe?

However, the preparation for the fight is very realistic. Issuing orders, people hurrying around, good stuff here. The Malevolent also seem intriguing. The reader knows about them, yet doesn't know about them at the same time. Can't wait to see what they really are.

I read up to first chapter, I will try to read more at a later date. So far, an excellent story. '''Talk