User blog:Chicken Bond/Finishing Touches to the Story!

Three blogs in three days? My, my, my....

Right, do I have any objections, constructive criticisms, or changes users want to voice out to me before I make this a page for the new story for the new story as seen in my last blog? I just want to take as much as I can into this story and make a brilliant piece of writing. Better than it already is. Better than anticlimactic, as Slice put. What do you guys want to see improved in the story?

Also, anyone have a better name for this story apart from Resignation? I feel it could do with a better title. Something simplistic, but reflective of the story.

BTW, just letting you know, this is a possible future for Mersery. It's likely to happen but it's not 100% likely. It has a fifty-fifty chance. If things go differently in JoD, then the outcome of this story may become radically different. Also....

MAY I HAVE YOUR UNDIVIDED ATTENTION!

TDG has offered some really good and very brilliant ideas to upgrade the story and make it darker and more complex. I'm willing to accept all of them into the mixing pot, and blend them altogether to what I already have. Tell me whether you think one or more of these ideas (or possibly all of them) should be blended into the story.

Idea one: On his last mission (not necessarily his last) Mersery was closer to capturing/defeating Millennium than he thought. Because of this his killer kills him, as he wants Millennium unknowingly to do something that will benefit his evil twisted plot(s).

Idea two: Mersery "retires" and is killed by someone from his past. Someone, up until now, he didn't know was undermining his plans to capture/defeat Millennium.

Idea three: Warlock kills him. Period. I imagine his scenario like the Doctor's and River Song's relationship. Warlock kills Mersery while he is young, and Mersery is old. No idea on Warlock's motive at the moment. Maybe a betrayal? Or he regrets this, but knows the penalties of melding with one's past/future? Perhaps Warlock tells Mersery this, just before they depart for the last time? Mersery accepts his fate, but doesn't expect it to happen so soon, or when/where it did.

Idea four: Mersery, at this point of in his life, killed because of his legacy. If he was killed because of his legacy - what he has done/accomplished - it would make the plot line allot more complex and darker. What I mean is, Mersery will be killed because of what he has become, not what he already was.

What do you guys think? What do you want to see added to the story?