User blog comment:Nynrah Ghostwriter/Nyn G and the Search for Suggestions/@comment-11429692-20181029190727

Glad to see you’re still around and doing stuff!

One thing that I’ve found helpful in general is doing Spotlight-style stories like some comic groups do, where you write a short story centering around one character to give the reader and yourself a better grasp of the character. I’ve only written one so far but it’s really helped me understand the character more and I’m looking forward to writing more.

But onto your specific things. Firstly, I’ve gotta say the name “Kana Makai” makes me feel real good. Fantastic sounding name. As for the Toa, I like the list of ideas you’ve got for them and you should definitely stick with them. Perhaps Pano should be the Toa who has been around longer than the others? Since you already have a Toa of Earth listed. It seems like that’s what you were leaning towards, but still. This would also create an interesting dynamic, where the team has a grizzled veteran but he isn’t the leader (puts me in mind of most portrayals of Kup from Transformers, although perhaps more useful). Basing his weapon off a Kanohi sounds like a fun idea, although perhaps I’m a bit biased since I’ve had a “Hau Shield” in the works for a while now lol. But lots of potential there regardless.

For Siro, do keep the free runner element. It feels like a new take on the typical acrobatic Air Toa, the same concept but still different in its own way. I’m leaning more towards the storytelling mechanic. Perhaps he’s traveled around fixing and inventing things, buying and selling parts, and keeps his own little chronicle of stories he’s heard and experienced. More of an unofficial chronicler in contrast to the official position we usually see them in.

Looks like you have some really interesting ideas here. It’s good to have a solid foundation of characters and ideas like this. Do pop in more often like this, it’s always fun to discuss ideas (at least when I’m not too lazy lol)!