User blog comment:LoganWoerner/Some of my saga told in a unique way/@comment-1610819-20110524083847

Not bad, but it could use a little bit of improvement. For one, the pacing's off in several places, but I doubt it'll be too much trouble to fix. Secondly, and perhaps more worryingly, there's a good deal of bits which are incoherent, grammatically incorrect, and difficult to understand without context. (I'd especially like to point out sentences 19-22: ''Makuta's brother, put to sleep/In which that time Evil would reap. Towards the Sea, where He was cast,/ From what had happenned in the past.")

Still, though, it's always good to know that someone else here has a taste in poetry. I look forward to your future writings.