User blog comment:Vorred/Elegy - Feedback Blog/@comment-958607-20141118001644

Ah, Fragmentation. Another truly remarkable chapter that further compliments your incredibly immerse comic world. Although not as pronounced as the previous two chapters, it has a nice continuation of insight into the Matoran village. Once again, your presentation of Rhagard is stunning and the is photography is next-level stuff.

A tiny grievance of mine is the fact we see the back of Berwak’s head so often. There’s just something about an Akaku on a Metru head that makes it feel all open and exposed and a tad awkward, especially since it means the telescopic lenses look to be on the wrong side of the face.

I do get a foreboding sense of dread that something is going to happen to Range in future chapters. I imagine that he’s going to be the central character of this little group, and I also doubt that this is a coincidence. I’m in two minds over how to interpret this. Either you’re genuinely hinting that you’re going to kill off Range and thus incite riots in the streets, or you’re going to kill off someone else and are teasing us with Range... it wouldn’t be the first time you’ve toyed with our heartstrings by leading up on to believe you’re killing one character only to kill another while our backs were turned, you cruel monster.

While I genuinely fear for Range’s safety, I am interested to see Vorred and Berwak getting grouped together on this. Might we see Berwak teaching our favourite Komau-wearing sleepwalker how to manipulate the color red?

How does Pauto feel about this?

With the first subplot out of the way, I will now comment on one of my favourite moments in the story: “[http://img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20141111175832/custombionicle/images/b/be/Elegy_f12.jpg This is not a weapon. It’s a head.]” The plot is so twisted at this point you would not believe it. Though this does raise the question of whether or not Pirai noticed it back in Patriots, suggesting a sinister undertone that justifies his whole violent debate with Merall. Pirai was right. They really were disturbing a grave as opposed to taking a weapon. When I die, I hope people find my head and carry it around, thinking it's the means to save the world.

Another truly wonderful feature of this chapter was the inclusion of Aescela, this time capable of joining in but still getting held back at the camp… with a mysterious Toa of Air. I just love the severity of Lanudos’ tone here, claiming she’s too important to lose and suggesting she has a different fate. Lanudos seems like a father telling his daughter she can’t go out. She is, phttp://img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20130728161755/custombionicle/images/c/cf/Patriots_y08.jpg once again], confined to the village, and I just love her little pout at the end.

Highlight of the chapter: Range waving. He just looks so adorable here and I can’t believe you’re hinting that he’s going to get killed off. Under this context, I’m trying to imagine a story without Range’s light-hearted manner and ability to defuse situations, like he did at the Bohrok camp previously. The death of such a comic character would undoubtedly provide a distinct tonal shift. But, I swear, if his killer laughs and asks “where’s Range now?” after pushing him off a cliff I will genuinely lose it.

I am, of course, left wondering what's so special about Dorvan's mask? Or, better question, does this make Theran's mask special since Chaeus and Brorag's masks weren't special? Given that we’re probably going to find out in future chapters, I doubt you’ll address this, but I think they’re good questions to base predictions off of.