Talk:The Eyes of Dathachuri

So far one of my favorites from the writing contest's entries. Very Lovecraftian in a lot of ways (especially the eldritch god Dathachuri and the unpronounceability of some of the names). I like how it begins with a rather soft and light tone and then slowly delves into some pretty dark stuff. Very well, written. However, there are some grammar errors you may want to address (at one point I saw you used "wonder" instead of "wander" for "wandered into my domain".). Still one of my faves, so I had to comment XD.

Best of luck!

-- Echo 1:  High Resolution,   Poor Quality  05:53, February 28, 2014 (UTC)