Talk:Black Plague

Rating
Hey Ahpolki!

This is finally your rating for your entry, Black Plague. There were many parts of this story I liked. The intro was nicely done, describing the story of that unfortunate Skakdi which ended with his death. That builds up some great suspense on what will happen to him.

The introdutcion of both Glonor and Kenod was well done, as was their way to start their adventure. I liked the cameo of characters like Chorrum!

The ending... who would've thought that Danza was the one to write the distress letter? It makes a lot of sense to me with him being the one who got word out of the attack.

But the most important part to discuss here are certainly chapters 2-4, the center of this story. While it is well-written no doubt, I had the feeling that this is "just" a fanfiction to my story... you concentrated the actions on an entirely new, probably even more powerful enemy than Nuva or Tilira. While a new but smaller thread would've matched I don't think I can possibly put this as canon into my story. These short stories were meant to explain backgrounds, not open entire new plot lines which will affect my story entirely!

I hope you don't take this badly, I still like the story and your style. I will list your points down below for you to see what you would've achieved :)

Style of writing: ( 7 / 10 )

Originality: ( 7 / 10 )

Suspense: ( 8 / 10 )

Character development: ( 8 / 10 )

Matching with the canon: ( 0 / 1 )

Total: ( 30 / 40 )