User blog comment:Vorred/Patriots - Feedback Blog/@comment-958607-20130710011048/@comment-958607-20130710135830

Recently, yes. :D I want Zero Hour to read like a play and, from what I have planned, it looks like it will be pretty long. (7 Acts + three different Epilogues), but it's actually turning into a huge storyline element for me and I'm really glad that I decided to do it. :D

I agree that there really isn't a way to start a visual BIONICLE story (like a film or comic) without including the Turaga Tale in some form. :P It's a great reference back to the old days and immediately says to the read: "this guy knows what he's doing."

I'm flattered. :D I was going to mention that Skakdi (who, if I ever mention by name, will be a female character) but I think it's interesting that they're both supporting characters who change the shape of events. Plus it really expands your story into the wider BIONICLE universe having a non-Toa/Matoran and I immediately felt the new character's presence from that banner you made for your blog post with him in it. :D

Well, nothing much, I felt it was quite fast-paced at the start with the narration over how they all had Inika builds and such, but that's a very minor point, and it's just my personal opinion. :P I'm sure nobody else noticed it and, when reading it again, I don't have a problem with it as such. It's mostly just the narration of the first and second panels I was confused by. :P I was wondering who Jorag was until I realised that you must have renamed Lordian. But the rest of the story flowed very well for me, and I loved Range's complaints mixed with Theran's annoyance. They make a great pair and Range in particular seems to have some appropriate comedic value. :P

Well, I wouldn't want to accidentally guess correctly - I do, after all, hate when readers guess the end of a story before you've gotten to it in writing - so I'll post my theory on your talk page in a spoiler box. :P

I'm glad to hear that. :D Merall and Brorag are really becoming favorites of mine, despite the face that they haven't had much screen time. :P My personal favorites so far include: Range, Merall, Brorag, Viretha, Pirai, Solunus and Aescela. Theran doesn't click for me in the same way, but I still find him likable and logical. :P

Oh, and one other thing that I loved about this chapter but forgot to mention was Solunus' quote "We have received messages from skilled Toa all overthis place who want to aid us." It got me really excited for the possibility of reinforcements entering and future characters appearing. :P

I really can't wait for the next installment. XD