User blog comment:BobTheDoctor27/Judgment Day: Preview/@comment-2215631-20140308155622/@comment-2215631-20140308164623

I'm glad that I can give you some feedback for once :P

I always thought that the Time Slip was the cause of their lack of knowledge of the GSR, but it really was never talked about. Enjoy the fact that you use the reference, because it's unique ;)

Great :P Thode seems like an interesting character with a lot of regrets.

As for the Kanohi problem, I suggest doing something like this. Instead of writing "The [insert Kanohi]-wearer says this", you could write something like this:

''Thode's kanohi concealed any emotion on his face as he spoke, but the shape of the Miru made it seem like the mercenary was smiling. It was disconcerting, to say the least.''

This is not an improvised sentence from the preview, I just made it up. I bet you can come up with something different if you tried. I often resort to this:

"[insert quote]", Kemlar said, her jet-black kanohi highlighted in the morning light.

It flows a lot better than "the Mask of Rahi Control-wearer said". That may just be my opinion; I'm just trying to come up with something more pleasing to me XD.

And when I said I hunger for more, I meant I'm looking forward to the full release ;)