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"They belong to me" Merall, Elegy Chapter 3: Yesteryear

The deaths of the first two Farside Toa weren't as dramatic as the one of Brorag was, even though all of them knew each other and had some kind of connection. I don't want them to be forgotten so easily as they were important for the team. But that's only one reason why I mentioned them. I have something nice planned for them!

It's amazing how I was able to make you to like Lanudos so fast :D He appeared in only two chapters so far and he was probably the character you wrote most about! As everyone else, he has a story. Only the future might tell what that was.

The Miru is such a great mask for all kind of different expressions indeed! It's not only seen here, but also with your Thode, who is also one of the great characters in your story.

I think it was important to finally find some closure to the events of Lost, which was a very open story with no real beginning or end. More will come later, but at least she could talk about the events briefly with her old friends.

Maybe Lorani's way of talking is similar to the silent RPG protagonists who don't talk and yet everybody knows their name and what they want to say ;)

We sadly won't be able to see any huts from the inside. Merall's bed in one of them is most likely taken by somebody else already, seeing that she was absent for quite a long time. But I could get my drawing pad and try to visualize how it looked like with my amazing drawing skills :P

Thanks again for this long review of every aspect from this chapter!