User blog comment:Shadowmaster/The Secret Revealed/@comment-3412476-20110227031149

Excellent work. It left me eager to read the rest, when you get it finished.

A few things, though: The first chapter seems to be slightly rushed in places, though this problem is gone by the second chapter. I think it could also use a bit of info/history of the Savages, not a lot, but more than it has right now.