Talk:Broken Soul

Crp11's review
Rating: B

First of all, this is a well written story with many strengths, sorry it took me so long to review this, but I would like to congradulate you for your work.

Why don't I start off with some strengths


 * It is a decently written story with good imagery that ''captures" some of the scene.


 * The plot is mostly original with few subjects that are commonly used.


 * The Dialogue uses good word choice and expresses the character's emotion clearly.


 * The scene was dramatic and, in a way, intense, which is what a lot of good stories should be.

I'll read over the story again to see if I can come up with more strengths

Now for some weaknesses.


 * The description of the setting didn't seem very clear to me. I'm not saying you didn't describe the location, I just got somewhat confused on where Rak'ven was at one moment.


 * There are small amounts of grammar errors that caught my attention, but they didn't distract me from the plot of the story.


 * Some of the details of the events could be thickened a little more, like the scene where Rak'ven lands on the ship and cracks it's hull.

The strengths outweigh the weaknesses on this one. Even though this list makes it seem balanced between good and bad, the weaknesses are minimal compared to the strengths, this story definitely has potential. Combat   Robotic     Prototype    11    23:06, November 3, 2011 (UTC)