User blog:Jaggedthorn/New Mary Sue Test

The Old Mary Sue test doesn't really revolve entirely with Bionicle, so it must be edited to fit with the universe of course and 'its' laws and physics. Hence why I'm making this blog. It will still retain a lot of elements form the original so here's something CL, Mizz, Mazeka, and I've worked on.

Mary Sue Test
1.Is your character a crossbreed/hybrid of any kind? [2] 2. Does the character have an unusual, non-negative physical trait that sets him apart from others? [2] 3. Does the character habitually share profound wisdom or knowledge? [1] 4. Are others' rules bent or broken to accommodate this character in the plot? [2] 5. Is your character openly violent, yet only toward those whom she/he believes “deserve it?” [2] 6. Do authority figures treat this character exceptionally harshly or kindly? [1] 7. Does your character succeed at virtually everything she/he tries? [5] 8. Has the character never lost in any kind of fight or competition? [4] 9. Is the character involved in suddenly appearing and disappearing situations unrelated to the plot-line with no valid explanation? [3] 10. Does your character save the day far more often than any of the other main characters? [1] 11. Does your character die over-heroically? (Such as taking unnecessary risks.) [5] 12. Do the antagonists ever try to take advantage of the character's weaknesses? [-2] 13.Does the character receive help from higher beings? [4] 14.Does the character “just know things,” without explanation? [4] 15. Do greater beings go to him/her for help? [4] 16.Is your character ever spared by an otherwise-ruthless villain? [4] 17.Do all the main characters end up at least grudgingly impressed by your character's skills and/or virtues? (Does not count if they are easily impressed due to their own inexperience.) [4] TBC
 * With all of the advantage of the two derivative species? [3]
 * And none of the disadvantages? [3]
 * Does it involve the character's eyes? [1]
 * Is it important to the plot? [2]
 * Does the character habitually share profound wisdom or knowledge? [1]
 * Does this often help her/him save the day? [1]
 * Does the character “just know things,” without explanation? [4]
 * Are the natural laws of the universe broken as well? [3]
 * Are they being treated without reason? [1]
 * Is it convenient for the plot? [2]
 * Do her/his initial plans, strategies, ideas, etc. always work? [3]
 * In improbable situations? [1]
 * Due to improbable good fortune? [1]
 * Against his/her rival(s)? [1]
 * Due to an acquired weapon/power? [1]
 * While always fighting alone/turning down assistance? [1]
 * Even when there's no good reason why another character wouldn't have been just as capable? [3]
 * Does everyone mourn the death of your character, even those who hate them? [2]
 * Is she/he revived by the end of the story? [4]
 * In such a way that he/she was the only death? [1]
 * Successfully? [-3]
 * Does she/he eventually become a higher being? [5]
 * Does the higher beings only go to them for help? [2]
 * Do the greater beings only go to them for help? [2]
 * Despite the fact that he/she has already done massive harm to the villain or the villain's forces? [3]
 * Because the villain is attracted to your character? [3]
 * Does your character modestly dismiss or deflect well-earned compliments regarding these? [2]
 * Are the only ones who hate the character antagonists, or else envious and spiteful? [2]