User blog comment:Tex499/Introductions, Moc Contest Entry, Moc Blog and a small surprise/@comment-5900628-20150116181442

Enter the critic.

Siretii looks like a nice MOC, but with some problems. Mainly with the colors. Light blue is limited to her mask and chest, and is nowhere else on her. My usual rule is, if a color can't be spread evenly on a MOC and doesn't have a story reason to look different, it should be removed. The dark blue waist and two trans blue feet have similar problems. Her back also seems rather clunky compared to the rest of her.

Arryt could do with some different pieces for forearms, the ones she has are rather big for her. Not sure if I like the Whenua drills attached to them either. Vergil looks good, except that the chestplate is too big for him and the exposed pins on the wings don't seem to do anything. Unkyex could do with some shoulder armor, and some of the technic holes in his torso filled. Kelira ought to have grey thighs instead of gunmetal ones.

Not much to say on the first three Matoran, seeing as they aren't your design... 2 of the 3 of them have feet that break the color scheme. For your custom matoran, they have really skinny shoulders; I would suggest you use the larger upper limb size. The Hagah's gold Zamor/"Thornax" launcher conflicts with the old gold armor. It might look better in silver or gunmetal. I don't much like the Hordika design in most respects, the upper arms are weird and gappy, as is the torso. Not sure why you've given your Toa mismatched thigh armor. Naho's about as good as a regular Metru build, the Kanoka launcher is a cool function. Okoreke needs grey (and shorter) upper limbs. Weiss's arms are pretty bad, redo them please. Monty ought to have a different type of torso that doesn't rely on the silver Hordika chestplate. No comment on Tex except about the open pins.

Licentia has a decent color scheme (random Pakari aside), but I do feel her build is lacking. Bellum's nice everywhere except his arms. Lariska is meh, I don't care for the tube. Krakua just looks like a mess of parts to me.

There. How about that awesome feedback.